Integrating Quotes – a Worksheet

SAMPLE I ORIGINAL

The universities themselves are policing students’ speech very closely, and making people nervous to express ideas in case they are deemed as offensive. The authors claim that this affects students because it “prepares them poorly for professional life, which often demands intellectual engagement with people and ideas one might find uncongenial or wrong.” Creating a culture where speech must be monitored and topics must be banned is only going to hurt students when they eventually leave college.

SAMPLE I REVISION

The universities themselves are policing students’ speech very closely, and making people nervous to express ideas in case they are deemed as offensive. Lukianoff and Haidt claim that this affects students because it’s not a realistic representation of the professional world outside of college, “which often demands intellectual engagement with people and ideas one might find uncongenial or wrong” (6). Creating a culture where speech must be monitored and topics must be banned will not prepare students to face those issues in their post college jobs, which will leave them at a disadvantage.  I reworked the signal phrase to make the flow into the quote seem less forced. I also named which authors I was referring to so the reader would not be confused. I added more to my explanation to make the connection stronger, and make the reader understand why I used that quote.

SAMPLE II ORIGINAL

These ideas are very in line with Dweck’s idea of a growth mindset, because students should be required to push outside of their comfort zones. “Classrooms should never be so comfortable that intellectual confrontation becomes taboo” (Roth). Dweck suggests that the only way to achieve intellectual growth is through breaking out of that comfort zone.

SAMPLE II REVISION

These ideas are very in line with Dweck’s idea of a growth mindset, because students should be required to push outside of their comfort zones. Dweck suggests that the only way to achieve intellectual growth is through breaking out of that comfort zone. “Classrooms should never be so comfortable that intellectual confrontation becomes taboo” (Roth). Classrooms need to have an environment that rewards challenging yourself and stepping out of your comfort zone.  -I took the original explanation and used it as the signal phrase. I then created a new explanation to better connect the ideas with my thesis by proposing solutions to the fixed mindset problem.