INTRODUCTION: I didn’t make too many changes to my intro, mostly because I liked the way I worded it for the most part. The only important change I made was I rewrote a new thesis. In my original thesis I had a quote from Dweck, and I felt that I should make it more my own. So, I made a clear and simple thesis that described my argument/ POV.

EVIDENCE & EXPLANATION: I added a lot of new evidence in my final draft. I added specific arguments for my thesis. I added that trigger warnings were detrimental, I added more explanation of a fixed mindset and how it relates to modern college students, and I talked about what the universities can do to fix the problem.

REORGANIZATION: I didn’t reorganize the paper too much, except deleting almost an entire paragraph for being repetitive, and using some parts of that paragraph into other areas of my paper, like quotes and explanations. I took the quotes from the old paragraph and put them into other paragraphs where I felt they flowed better and made a better argument.

NEW PARAGRAPHS: I felt I didn’t have much evidence for the problems with the modern coddling movement so I added an entire paragraph talking about trigger warnings and their effects. I also added a new paragraph describing what a fixed mindset was and its application to the modern coddling problem.