The biggest concerns I have about my draft are making a solid conclusion. I submitted my draft without a conclusion because I wasn’t sure how I was going to make changes or if I would add more. My peers liked my introduction and said I had a clear thesis/idea for my paper. Kayla Midolo said, “you have a strong thesis and you paragraphs are set up well.” I think I’m working the best with Scheuer in my second paragraph, where I set up his ideas of liberal arts and how they connect with liberal arts. Meg Cutter suggested I reword or rearrange part of the paragraph to make it flow better. Kayla Midolo suggested I use different quotes to better strengthen my ideas. I’m working the best with the handbook is in the third paragraph. Meg Cutter suggested that ” if I were you I would consider either defining the UNE core themes before hand or completely getting rid of the opening sentence in the paragraph.” She is suggesting that I provide more context on the core themes at UNE. The biggest challenge in my essay according to multiple peers is that my quote explanations are weak. Meg Cutter commented “the intros to the quotes are adequate in most cases but many of the quotes just end with that and more onto another idea/topic.” I think what I need to do is just rewrite my explanations for quotes and make them stronger. Another issue my peers saw was I wasn’t as organized as I should be with my ideas. I think if I develop some ideas more, and explain them better with more evidence from the texts then I will be in a better spot with my paper.